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Young people are often influenced by their peers. This is called peer group pressure. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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●In our modern life, the majority of adolescents prefer to spend their time with their
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 rather
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 old Individuals.
This
 is called coequal group
pressure
. Because they feel better if they spend more time with
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a peer
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peer
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. From my point of view, there are
disadvantages
 and advantages to
peer
pressure
 on children.
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 it is extremely worthwhile for adolescents ●On the one hand, there are a number of significant benefits of spending
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time with their peers.
First
 of all, young individuals who try to compete with their age peers and are influenced by them can get ahead in life.
Peer
pressure
, despite its negative effects on many, motivates few people in their lives.
For example
, students in the same class constantly strive to be ahead of their
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, which can create healthy educational competition.
Therefore
, young people who compete with positive thinking can be effective. ●
On the other hand
, being influenced by others can lead to depressed youth, the results of which are seen every year in suicides and youths engaging in negative activities after becoming disillusioned with themselves. Everyone and everyone is different and
therefore
 plays a different role in
this
 universe. As Einstein once said, if the ability of a fish is measured by its ability to climb a tree, it may spend its whole life thinking that it is. stupid, so not everyone can excel at everything. Again, coequal
pressure
 can lead to depression. ●In conclusion, today's youth are greatly influenced by their peers, which creates
peer
pressure
, which some
believe
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 can lead to a healthy competitive environment.
However
, it is clear that the
disadvantages
 of
peer
pressure
 outweigh the
disadvantages
. To separate our youth from the negative aspects of
this
 trend and bring forth a
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 young generation, proper
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 may be required to turn
disadvantages
 into advantages.
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