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The bar shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days

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The given column graph demonstrates the proportion of people visiting a
cinema
 during the different weekdays in one of the European countries from 2007
2003
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 Overall, it is clear from the diagram that residents of
this
 country are used to going to the
cinema
 at the end of the week.
Therefore
, the number of visitors to the
cinema
 at the beginning of the week is significantly less. It can be seen that
cinema
 attendance peaked on Saturdays
with
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at
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 40% 45% and in 2003, 2005 and 2007 respectively.
Moreover
,
fridays
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Fridays
Friday
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 and
sundays
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Sundays
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 were not less than 30
percent
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per cent
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 in all three periods. As for the beginning of the
week
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,week
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 all period figures are less than 20
percent
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per cent
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. Especially on
mondays
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Mondays
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 and
thursdays
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Thursdays
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,
percent
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per cent
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 of
cinema
 visitors is less than 15%. It is
also
 clear
than
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that
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 people
of
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in
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this
 country prefer to go to the
cinema
 on Tuesday than on
monday
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Monday
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.
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