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International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. To what extend do you agree with this?

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Nowadays international
tourist
 is more available than at any time.A few individuals think that it will have positive consequences and others argue that.I agree with
this
 statement.Now I will explain in
this
 essay along with examples of
this
 statement.
Firstly
,international
tourism
 brings financial benefits to a foreign country.As tourists,
tourist
 they spend their money purchasing food and clothes and other daily necessity grocery.
Moreover
, in the
world
Add a comma
,world
show examples
 some countries are the most suitable destinations for tourists, because of the natural and available
tourist
 facilities there that are the main reason to choose these destionans.
For example
, the UK is the most favourable international
tourist
 destination, every year more than 10 million people visit
this
 country.
Furthermore
, in the UK 10 per cent of GDP comes from
this
tourism
 hospitality
also
 there are significant numbers of countries major in
tourism
such
 as Bangladesh, India, the USA etc.
On the other hand
, A few people disagree that they think
tourism
 is unnecessary it is just spending time and money.They
also
 added that in some ,country Governments build hotels and resorts for tourists
instead
 of building schools, universities, hospitals and roads. In conclusion, I would say that
tourism
 is the most vital thing for multicultural and economic development because international
tourism
 is one of the ways people are familiar with other nations and exchange their emotions and love for other nations.
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