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The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#road #transport #goods #drivers #test #year
Nowadays
transport
 is the invention which
help
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 us move around or move our ищщл.
Actually
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 almost every person can drive a
car
. But if talk about
the
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road
transport
,
less
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people
 can drive it. Because it is really hard, the
road
car
 huge and heavy. If the
road
transport
 has
a baggage
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baggage
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 it is harder than without baggage.
People
 who learn to drive
the
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road
car
, study and practice
such
 a long time.
However
, nowadays we have so many accidents
by
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the
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road
 cars. There are many different reasons,
for
example
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,example
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 bad visibility and the inability of
drivers
 to assess the speed and trajectory of other
road
 users, about 30
percent
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per cent
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 affects the weather. So
in
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to
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this
extent
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 I
am agree
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agree
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 with that to ask
drivers
 to take a driving test every year for
safety
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the safety
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driver`s
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of driver`s
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 lives. In my opinion, it is not
depends
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 on the exam only, because situations are different. And it is not always
fault
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the fault
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 driver`s the
road
transport
. Sometimes it is
fault
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the fault
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another
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other
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drivers
 and
people
 on the motorway, who do not follow the rules of the
road
. In my view,
people
 have to improve the system of
the
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road
 cars.
For instance
, one of the most important is will using
the
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a
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 special system in
the
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road
car
 which
help
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helps
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 to recognize pedestrian zones or cyclists. It is warning
drivers
 about their presence on the
road
 and
help
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helps
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 to avoid accidents.
Also
 at night time, the
road
have
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has
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 to be very
lighting
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light
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, might be it
is helps
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helps
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. In conclusion, every driver must
to
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apply
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know about the rules of the
road
, because it is one of the
major
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majors
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 on the
road
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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