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Some people think that getting a degree from a university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe that is would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead.

#people #university #guarantee #job #work
Today there are various ways for getting
job
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a job
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 and
specilize
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specialize
 in it.Some people believe that getting a degree from a university is useful and helpful for having a profession,but others
says
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say
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 we must go straight into
work
 and get experience
instead
.In
this
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 we will investigate
this
 subject and
also
 present some pros and cons.
Although
;
possible
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a possible
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 university has
attractive
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an attractive
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 and theoretical atmosphere,
nevertheles
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nevertheless
 I absolutely agree if someone has
plan
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 to get a job , that must go straight into
work
. When you start
a
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work
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work
 in a real condition_atmosphere you gain several
advantage
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. You make a relationship with
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the expert
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expert
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experts
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,
boss
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bosses
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,
colleagues
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and colleagues
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... as well as accustom to hours of
work
, income, how to
work
 with tools ... or deal with clients. Regardless of these facts the best benefit , making or getting new experiences during working and
also
consult
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consulting
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 with others for
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a solution
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solution
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. As I have already mentioned we must do
works
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work
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 directly. Universities
has
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 a specific plan, they just survey , present,
teach
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and teach
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 ...
problems
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_ skills theoretically, as
the
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a
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 result students will don't have
commitment
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a commitment
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for
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 it, while if you enter to
work
 directly, you forced
learn
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to learn
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 and present tasks correctly, because you
have
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are have
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 a chief,
responsiblity
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responsibility
,
in
addition
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 you earn money through it. It seems
has
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to have
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 only one defect. You maybe
relay
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rely
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 on
experiment
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experiments
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 and don't have
deal
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 with
by
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apply
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scientific ideas or methods. In conclusion nowadays if someone has
decided
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 get
a
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 occupation, there are different ways,
for
instance
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 we can go to university and study lessons _ skills theoretically with
special
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the special
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situation
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situations
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 there.
Other
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 way we can go straight into
work
,
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is with
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with
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by
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getting new
experience
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experiences
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such
 as
deal
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dealing
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 with
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a teammate
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teammate
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teammates
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, clients,
wage
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wages
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,
reward
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rewards
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... . Generally
work
 incidents by pros and cons.
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