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The key solution for the environmental issues is for the current generation to live a less comfortable life to benefit future generations . to what extend do you agree or disagree?

#generation #life #benefit #future #generations
Environment
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 has always been one of the most significant and fundamental problems for every
countries
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. Some believe the key solution for the environmental issues is for the current generation to live a less comfortable life to benefit future generations . In
this
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 we will discuss to what
extend
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 we agree or disagree . As we have already mentioned environmental issues are serious and important , but
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 comfortable life is totally wrong and I completely disagree. If we have decided to solve
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 crisis there are several solutions , at the
first
 , governments must control their
consumptions
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through
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 ordering all
of
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department
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 or even
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 . Another solution is encouraging and supporting scientists in order to make machines , new technologies for
economicing
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economic
economical
 or controlling it . If we have
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planned
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 future
generations
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generations'
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 benefit and ‌use of
environment
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the environment
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 ,
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 we must do cultural
works
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. Governments can increase
culture loving
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culture-loving
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environment
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environments
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 in society ,
for
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 create tv
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programs
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program
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,
education
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 in schools or organize local groups. As the result ,
definitely
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 the country will be rich
culture
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by
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 at the least difficulties for
environment
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the environment
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. In conclusion for the environmental issues ,
less
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 comfortable life isn't efficient , both governments and people must collaborate , generally control their
consumptions
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by
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 scientific ways and
addition
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loving
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environment
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