Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places?
There is a controversial perspective heating up a debate over whether a wealth of historical exhibition halls attract tourist but not indigenous
people
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but the Use synonyms
local
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on the ground that they are already similar to their culture and tradition so they have no demand for learning its historical knowledge. Meanwhile Fix the agreement mistake
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tourists
who do not have a good understanding of other areas want to find out about their history. Use synonyms
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people
who live in Vietnam will know obviously about the history of Hanoi through books or stories. Use synonyms
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, they will spend their time discovering some historical places in other areas, Linking Words
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However
, there are myriads of certain Linking Words
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sites
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museums
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local
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locals
sites
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To sum up
, it is easily understandable that Linking Words
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sites
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, there are plenty of methods to Linking Words
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Task Response
Task Response: The essay addresses the prompt by discussing reasons why local people are less attracted to historical sites and provides potential solutions. However, the development of ideas lacks depth, and the conclusion is quite abrupt.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: The essay has a somewhat logical structure, but the introduction and conclusion need improvement for better coherence and cohesion. Additionally, the ideas are not fully developed, causing some disjointedness in the essay.
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