There will be a traditional celebration in your country and you want to invite your friend from an English-speaking country. Write him/her a letter and -invite your friend, <bp1 > -explain what happens at the party, <bp 2 > -describe the tradition and why it’s important in your country, - say why it is important for your friend to be there.<bp 3 >

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Dear Brooke, I’m so sorry for not contacting you in a while, but super excited now, to invite you to celebrate the Diwali festival with us in India on 25th of the

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month. I am aware of the fact that you always wanted to see and festival of lights which is celebrated in with full excitement across India , but

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bang in Delhi, which is my city, so letting you know in well advance so that you can start the processing for visa and tickets and be here 3-4 days before the actual day.

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festival is very important

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all Indians as

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day is a day when good deed won over

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evil thought and Lord Ram came back home after 14 years post killing Ravan who kidnapped his wife Sita. As I have always told you that the entire Diwali week is a week of happiness, lights, gifts and fire-crackers. All the members of

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are busy

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cleaning and decorating the house with new stuff and purchasing

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new

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and gifts for all loved ones

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on D-day am sure you will enjoy seeing

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family bond and very special Diwali pooja done by all of us together. Can’t wait to see you and

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the days. Best Regards, Nalini

Submitted by nalini.1209 on Tue Jan 10 2023

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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8 paragraphs

219 words

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