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There will be a traditional celebration in your country and you want to invite your friend from an English-speaking country. Write him/her a letter and -invite your friend, <bp1 > -explain what happens at the party, <bp 2 > -describe the tradition and why it’s important in your country, - say why it is important for your friend to be there.<bp 3 >

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Dear Brooke, I’m so sorry for not contacting you in a while, but super excited now, to invite you to celebrate the Diwali festival with us in India on 25th of the
next
 month. I am aware of the fact that you always wanted to see and festival of lights which is celebrated in with full excitement across India , but
specially
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 bang in Delhi, which is my city, so letting you know in well advance so that you can start the processing for visa and tickets and be here 3-4 days before the actual day.
This
 festival is very important
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 all Indians as
this
 day is a day when good deed won over
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evil thought and Lord Ram came back home after 14 years post killing Ravan who kidnapped his wife Sita. As I have always told you that the entire Diwali week is a week of happiness, lights, gifts and fire-crackers. All the members of
family
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the family
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 are busy
in
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cleaning and decorating the house with new stuff and purchasing
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new
cloths
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 and gifts for all loved ones
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on D-day am sure you will enjoy seeing
this
 family bond and very special Diwali pooja done by all of us together. Can’t wait to see you and
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 the days. Best Regards, Nalini
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