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Band 0.5

People today are not fit as they were in the past . What are the causes for this ? What can the government do to deal with this isss?

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Table 1. Results
deduced
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were deduced
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as a result
Linking Words
 of open pit planning.
Also
Linking Words
, it should be noted, in
calculation
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the calculation
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 process, there were taken into consideration parameters, indicated below: Block slope angles; Ore mining cost ($/
ton
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); Waste mining cost ($/
ton
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); Processing cost ($/
ton
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); Mineral price ($/
ton
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); General administrative costs ($); Mineral density (
ton
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/m^3); Dilution amount (%); Mineral recovery rate (%); Mineral processing general spendings ($); Depth coefficient ($); Discount rate and etc.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyles
  • modern conveniences
  • physical education
  • sports facilities
  • unhealthy eating habits
  • fast food
  • work-related stress
  • fitness campaigns
  • public participation
  • subsidizing
  • gym memberships
  • health and fitness programs
  • regulations
  • advertising
  • unhealthy food
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