Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. What might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Introduction

It is generally accepted that many people decide to do self-business or freelance more than work in

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To be more precise, many people

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something when they had good performance in

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trader or

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an entrepreneur.

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a self-employee.

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organization, will

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decision

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for their life path too.

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Jan 10, 2023

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

259 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

self-employment
freelancing
entrepreneurship
autonomy
financial stability
work-life balance
financial insecurity
lack of support
resources
long working hours
uncertain income
job security

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