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Some people think that because some children find some subject such as mathematics and philosophy difficult, they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree?

#people #children #mathematics #philosophy
It is true that might few
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facing
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 problems with
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a subject
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subject
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subjects
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such
 as statistics and psychology because it is hard to read and
atleast
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at least
 options should be available for middlers who think that it is tough. In my, opinion the position of choosing the
subject
 appears to be more rational. In
this
, essay we will
further
 elaborate on the positive effects of
this
 trend and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriads of reasons which will
further
 explain
this
 argument. Yet, the most preponderant fact is that every
human kind
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 has a different
mind-set
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mindset
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 and various
perspective
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perspectives
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 to view the world.
For
instance
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 science is easy for me. But,
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science is not amiable to the other learners. Another pivotal aspect is that the
option
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 system should be stated in
early
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the early
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 stage because if the child like any
subject
 so they choose them
initially
. Moving
further
, it is pertinent to mention that the survey conducted by the prestigious university Oxford in London revealed that kids who
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select
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 their subjects
in
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 young age . It is
higher
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 probability they do PhD in
subject
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 laterally. Probing ahead, one of the main underlying reasons stems is that
although
, the bullet point is that toddlers are not feeling
pressure
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the pressure
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with
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the
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subjects
who
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 they do not adore.
Besides
,
option
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options
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 and
choice
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choices
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 build
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decision making
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 skills in person and it is vital for
future
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.
Also
, the article published in the eminent newspaper the Hindustan Times depicts that in
the
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America,
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population is successful because they have
a rights
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 to
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 things in every department
such
 as in school, college, and, university. According to the argument aforementioned above, one can reach a conclusion that the benefits of the option system are instrumental too great.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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