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Nowadays in many countries, both women and men work full-time. Logically, women and men should share household tasks equally. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, it seems that both females and males
work
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time
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. Logically,
women
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 and
men
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 should allot
household
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tasks
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 equally, in
this
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 paper, I will argue that people should divide the
housework
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tasks
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. The reason for
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 is twofold.
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, it is vitally important that if humans share
household
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tasks
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 equally,
women
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 will not have a lot of
work
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 at the house. At the moment most individuals live in urban areas.
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 ,
men
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 do not have many outdoor works.
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 would mean that most males have enough free
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 for assisting to females in indoor
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.
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, in rural areas ,
men
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 have a lot of
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 in the garden or in the yard.
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 why in my opinion, it is not necessary to share
housework
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tasks
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 equally in villages .
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 and more importantly, it is true that
men
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 and
women
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 have the same working
time
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 ,
however
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, some
men
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work
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 harder jobs than
women
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 . It is often the case that when males finish their working
time
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 , they can go home tired. At that
time
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,
men
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 will not want to do
housework
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tasks
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 .
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, technical means are developed currently.
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 why
women
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 do not have difficulty with
housework
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tasks
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 .
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, most
household
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tasks
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 are not suitable for
men
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 .
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, laundry, sweeping and cooking . Because
women
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 have become perfect in these areas. By way of conclusion, I do not agree that humans should divide
household
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tasks
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 equally at the present. Because
men
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 have enough
work
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 nowadays .
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