Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.  What might this be the case? What could be the disadcantages of being self-employed?

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establishing own
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and reaching financial freedom,
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respectively
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understand
the background of
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idea and figure out the possible bad sides of
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mentality. In fact, creating a new kind of
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profession or
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work to serve society has a huge amount of risk due to the posibilities of lack of experience and financial crises.
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connected with getting
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range of knowledge in a particular field. A direct result
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in
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the founders' practical skills. It can be assumed that these creators of firms, would have just theoric knowledge.
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official lawyer in Turkey, people should obey the restrictions of bars and there are some requirements seeking from
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of
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. The
first
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for a year to see how the system is working.
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how important
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is. Most of the
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we can observe that lawyers just establish their firms without
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any strong team due to
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that huge law firms suffer
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sharply. These are just two points out of many that should be demonstrated while creating a new
business
. Yes, the points mentioned above offer strong arguments but
also
include a
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of change of having financial crises during the process we discussed. The
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reasoning
remaining
behind
this
point is that establishing and running a new
business
model
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a huge investments
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.
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is because of the possible competition between companies.
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wasting
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for a new brand's founders.
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he should spend
time
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finding clients and consumers for a while. During that
time
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gained already, and forgetting some
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about a specific field of study that
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in the universities. All in all, these two possible issues might
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to process. Overall,
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way of career between being
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is a serious discussing point,
however
supporting reasons and some possible risks that we
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above
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level of
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experience
and some financial matters, suggest the correct answer to find the right route.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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