Nowadays there are more opportunities for women than there were in the past. Some people think this situation has caused more problems than it has solved. What are your opinions on this?

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Today females have more opportunities than it was in the ancient world. Now they can study at school or university
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take part in voting etc. Many individuals feel that
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scenario has given more issues than correcting them.
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, I strongly disagree with
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statement
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, nowadays we have many already educated
women
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and many girls studying at schools and universities.
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, educated and clever people are increasing in our society.
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mean our economy , households and government will become better and stronger .
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,
a new inventions
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new inventions
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will appear frequently just because of the fact that around 40% are
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female scientists.
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, now girls can choose their
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and decide
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they want to be.
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,
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the 18 century in England
women
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could be only a housewife.
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, today ladies can work out if they want to have a family and take care of their family or
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if they
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want to be
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independent
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and make successful careers .
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, females are in many ways more gifted than males.
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, in cooking , painting ,
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medicine etc.
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more jobs now taking by them so, they
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become the source
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money and stabilities of their families. Personally, I am happy that now
women
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can do what they want and nowadays they have already broken the myth that
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are weak gender. In conclusion, the variety of opportunities for
women
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improves our world and modifies our society to more equality, and harmony.
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, we men do not need to forget that we need to help , support and encourage our wives , girlfriends , friends, sisters, mums etc.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • social justice
  • economic development
  • innovation
  • traditional family roles
  • shared responsibilities
  • diverse perspectives
  • creativity
  • decision-making
  • educational opportunities
  • work-life balance
  • traditionalists
  • societal friction
  • gender roles
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