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Nowadays there are more opportunities for women than there were in the past. Some people think this situation has caused more problems than it has solved. What are your opinions on this?

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Today females have more opportunities than it was in the ancient world. Now they can study at school or university
then
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 take part in voting etc. Many individuals feel that
this
 scenario has given more issues than correcting them.
However
, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement
Firstly
, nowadays we have many already educated
women
 and many girls studying at schools and universities.
As a result
 , educated and clever people are increasing in our society.
That is
 mean our economy , households and government will become better and stronger .
In Addition
,
a new inventions
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new inventions
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 will appear frequently just because of the fact that around 40% are
a
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female scientists.
Secondly
, now girls can choose their
role
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roles
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 and decide
whom
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who
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 they want to be.
For instance
,
on
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in
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 the 18 century in England
women
 could be only a housewife.
However
 , today ladies can work out if they want to have a family and take care of their family or
they
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if they
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 want to be
single
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 independent
woman
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women
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 and make successful careers .
Furthermore
, females are in many ways more gifted than males.
For example
, in cooking , painting ,
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medicine etc.
Accordingly
 more jobs now taking by them so, they
also
 become the source
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of
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 money and stabilities of their families. Personally, I am happy that now
women
 can do what they want and nowadays they have already broken the myth that
women
 are weak gender. In conclusion, the variety of opportunities for
women
 improves our world and modifies our society to more equality, and harmony.
However
, we men do not need to forget that we need to help , support and encourage our wives , girlfriends , friends, sisters, mums etc.
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