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It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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As
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globalization
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 rapidly in
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Internet
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 become prime pivotal media in many aspects of life. Some
people
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 stated that
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Internet
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the Internet
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 could be the perfect place to communicate, but some
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 argue that it might not be a great place to gather accurate sources. The writer will discuss both of the stated views and
also
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 the perspective for the motion.
Internet
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 helps the society to communicate towards each other easily. As
it
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could be seen, there
is
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 many types of communication spreading around and mainly it needs the
internet
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. Starting from
only
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the only
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call
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, text
message
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messages
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,
chat
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chats
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, video
call
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calls
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, voice
note
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 and so on.
This
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 upgrade in communication
enable
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to
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us to
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makes
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make
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 life easier.
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, a son who works in East Java can easily contact or
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 his mother through
the
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video call. They can talk 2 or 3 times a day and spend almost an hour
in
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 each call. It really
benefit
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 both of them as the parents would be less
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 about
his
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their
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 son’s well-being and the son
also
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 would always know about his
parents
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 health condition and other else. Even though
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internet
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the internet
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 already gives benefit, the drawbacks
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on
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in
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 the accuracy of
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information
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the information
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 and the case of identity theft. Since
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internet
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the internet
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 could easily
accessed
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be accessed
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 by many
people
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 from many different backgrounds, the
information
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 posted on it
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 might get manipulated easily.
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 manipulated
information
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have
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inclination
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an inclination
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 to many hoax and misunderstanding of a certain topic. Sometimes,
this
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 false data or news might create a big commotion in
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society. There is
also
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 a chance of identity theft with the
information
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, pictures,
educational
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and educational
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 background of someone
could
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that could
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 be accessed by everyone around the world. The data can be used to do some illegal
crime
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crimes
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 and lead to false
sentence
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sentences
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on
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for
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innocent
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an innocent
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person
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persons
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. From the reasons above, the writer
suggest
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to see
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seeing
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 the
internet
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 from two sides of
coin
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the coin
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. All in all,
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internet
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the internet
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have
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has
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their
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its
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 own white and black side, as for the white side it
already
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has already
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 been proved by every occupant with how
easy
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easily
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 they communicate towards each other, the limitation of
area
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 will not be a big problem anymore. While for the black side, the false data and even the fake identity could easily spread around the community.
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, as
the
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internet
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 user,
people
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 should have
a
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meticulous research about the
information
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 before accepting it and
people
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also
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 should protect their private
information
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 to make sure it would not be misused by
anonymous
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an anonymous
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person
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persons
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in
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on
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 the
internet
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Democratize access
  • Instant messaging
  • Real-time conversations
  • Credible sources
  • Misinformation
  • Unverified facts
  • Reputable news outlets
  • Biased opinions
  • Algorithm-driven content
  • Overreliance
  • Traditional methods
  • Search engines
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