some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible.to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that trying to make all foodstuff for the entire population is crucial , while, importing
food
item
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shold
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should
be low
quatity
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quality
quantity
. I completely agree with
the
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view because
food
security affects the independence of the
country
. On the one hand, if the
country
makes sufficient
food
that they require, they do not need to depend on another
country
, which helps the
country
's sovereignty.
For example
, one of the primary causes of a
country
's inflation is the price of
food
; if inflation rises, people may become dissatisfied, and the political regime may change
as a result
of agitation and civil unrest.
therfore
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Therefore
,
food
security plays a vital role in political stability.
Furhermore
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Furthermore
, the
food
supply chain can be disrupted due to natural
disaster
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or war
situation
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situations
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.
for example
, Ukraine is the largest
wheat
producer, and due to the war with Russia, most of the
wheat
production has been depleted, and Russia has blocked
wheat
transport. Indeed, if any state depends on
wheat
from Ukraine, they have to face
a
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unpresidented
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unprecedented
food
crisis .
On the other hand
, Imported goods have
became
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expensive and
and
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the
goverment
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government
spends
foreingh
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foreign
currency to import
food
. As
result
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of costly freight, labour cost and taxation , imported meals have considered
as
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luxuries and most people can not afford that
food
.
for instance
, many imported
food
items are only available in
main
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city centre due to
price
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of the goods.
In addition
, the government spends a lot of money to import even
food
that can be produced in the
country
. In conclusion, producing all
food
for a
country
is important because it ensures independence
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while importing
food
should be
a
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lower because imported
food
is expensive and
community
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cannot
affort
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afford
it.
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