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Band 5.5

Pollution and others environmental damage is caused by developing countries, which helps them become richer . To what extent do you agree with this.

In
this
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 contemporary world, developing
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 are to blame for causing environmental damage for their highly profitable activities. I agree with the above statement and
this
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 essay will elaborate on the reasons for
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 matter.
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 with , many developing
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 are poor and they want to build their economies fast to be like other developed
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.
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, they do
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 by producing more goods in order to get an upper hand in terms of trade.
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 means more goods sold will lead to a great inflow of money into the country
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 , making them richer. But, unfortunately, they are ignoring the side effects of
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 profitable activities.
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, India is the largest producer and supplier of clothing materials.
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, they have many factories across the country and these factories dump their waste directly into the ocean.
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,
this
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 leads to water contamination and after a few years later
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 will lead to the extinction of sea plants and creatures because of these harmful liquids.
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, causing a big risk to the
environment
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.
Moreover
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, most developing
countries
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 don't like to invest in protecting the
environment
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.
This
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 is because
environment
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 preservation schemes are costly and
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 may drain their profits. For an instance, some factories in developing
countries
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 emit greenhouse gases which are harmful to the atmosphere.
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,
this
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 will cause global warming which is a serious problem faced at present.
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, developed
countries
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 should step in and advise the governments of developing
countries
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 to stop all the activities that harm the
environment
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 and provide resources to install green technology to avoid pollution and other environmental damage. In conclusion, it is aptly clear that developing
countries
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 have the intention of making a profit at the expense of the
environment
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. I wholeheartedly agree with the aforementioned statement because I feel their main concern is to develop their economies and be like developed
countries
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.

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