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Some people consider national news as more important while other people think that international news is of more importance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 considered by a lot of members of the population more relevant than global ones. On the others side, seconds are considered more useful for others. In
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points of view are legit and understandable but it is
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 true that these days everyone must care about international events because of globalization and
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 because from those may
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 the internal ones.
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, give or find out solutions for worldwide problems is impossible but remain important know them to maintain or to create the best situation in our small city or nation.
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 is the reason why I am convinced that
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 what is going on around the world is the base
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 a victim. At the same time, do not take any type of interest
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 what specifically happened near to you is completely wrong. Even if the internal news could be more boring than the international ones, the firsts can give you more
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 information as a close street, city social events
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 which you can take part,
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 of danger, ... .
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, be informed about
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 situation could help you and
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 gives the possibility to become a direct part of your community. To conclude, referring to
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 type of information is always wrong to do a sort of selection about which are the most
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International reportage gives us the possibility to think about how to protect and
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improve our country while the Nationals are more useful in things like routine and hobbies.
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