Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matter(such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their wishes. other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

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claimed by several people that allowing
children
to make their own choices on daily matters
is
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mostly
to
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results
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in a
society
of
individuals
who only think about their own wishes, while some populations believe that it is important for
children
to make
decisions
about facts that affect them. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the
second
opinion and would like to highlight various advantages and drawbacks of encouraging the importance for
children
to make
decisions
about daily matters. I agree because of the below major reasons.
Firstly
, studies on
children
show that it is key of being
individuals
who
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a
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confidence in solving problems, could able to fast-moving
decision
, it starts from their childhood education and family history.
In addition
,if
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individuals
start to give
decisions
at the beginning of their life, they can easily face to impacts and
results
of their
decisions
.
For instance
, if the child decided to go
kindergarten
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to kindergarten
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in a summer dress in the winter time, parents can explain
to
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the situation of weather and dress contrast but they would
also
add that the
decision
will be the
child's
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children
child
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. When the child leaves
from
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home and
feel
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cold, he/she understands how he should profit about the experience about his/her parent's experience. Otherside, if the family would insist on their
decision
, the kid would never face to
results
of his/her
decision
and he would never experience
about
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that. There are many young
individuals
in
society
who doesn't face
of
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any result of their
decisions
and fall down even if there is a small problem.
On the other hand
, I believe
in
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also
that allowing
children
to make their own choices on every issue, has some effects on a
society
of
individuals
who only think about their own wishes but
this
is not the only reason for
this
. Parent has an important role in
this
part because families ought to educate their
children
how
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on how
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to respect our environment and others when they give
our
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their
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decisions
. To give our
decisions
will be some
results
and
this
result has to be respectful
and
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should consider we are not
only
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one
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in
this
world. Individual needs to belong the
society
and
society
has its own rules
by
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laws and value judgements. In conclusion, I would like to firmly agree with the idea of
children
making their own
decisions
about daily matters to start a life earlier and
society
should respect them since they are
future
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the future
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of our community by
also
teaching them how to make
decisions
inside of
society
and respect
other
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others
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alive.
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