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car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. how to do you think this statement is? what measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars.

There has been an incline in ownership of
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car
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 which has become a necessity for
people
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 ,especially the ones living in metropolitan
cities
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,
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 there has been a surge in four wheelers that has been owned by the population leading to traffic
jams
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 in most of the countries. I personally agree with
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 statement which would
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 be explained in the proceeding sections. To start with, a
car
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 today has become vital for any family as a normal family comprises one or two children,
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 a large majority of families living still joint families in many parts of the world,
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 the need for a
car
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 becomes foremost. With more number of four vehicles being sold and
people
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 having the kind of purchase power, traffic
jams
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 have become a common part of
people
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 living in big
cities
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such
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 as Mumbai, Delhi which usually see long
jams
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 all day.
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, with the launch of a number of
cars
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 by
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 dealers of almost every range, travelling in a
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 has become cheaper and more affordable for a common man in today's scenario which
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 leads to
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 being stuck in long queues. Authorities can inculcate a number of measures towards the growing population to curb the use of
cars
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.
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, pooling can be encouraged as a measure to diminish long
jams
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 as
people
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 travelling to a common direction or point can jump along and travel, which would
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 decrease the count of
cars
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 travelling especially during peak hours of the day.
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, the government could think of measures to stop the use of
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 by encouraging policies which can prevent certain
cars
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 from entering the
cities
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 during peak hours of the day like long-route vehicles being stopped in many
cities
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 in India, or the Odd-Even policy that was introduced in the city of Delhi to
control
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 the use of
cars
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 and
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 to
control
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 pollution in the city. To conclude, the usage of
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the car
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car
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 has significantly surged during the past couple of decades which is causing obstacles to
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control
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 traffic
jams
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 as
people
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 do get stuck for a long time in
jams
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,
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 government should take proper measures to
control
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 the current scenario or else it could
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 be alarming for their country.

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