More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawback

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is essential as a human being. As a person, of
course
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most of them wanted to go to the best colleges or universities to gain more knowledge. As the result, most
of
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the student
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student
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students
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choose to
study
overseas.
This
essay will elaborate what are the advantages and disadvantages regarding
study
abroad in the following paragraph.
To begin
with,
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in
foreign
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a foreign
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country
has many benefits
to
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for
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the student
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student
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students
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.
First
, if someone
come
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comes
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from an underdeveloped
country
that has
low
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a low
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education system and they go to a
country
that has
high
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a high
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system of education, that person will
able
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be able
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to learn more.
Second
,
Students
they
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have usually
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a special
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aspect of interest, if their
country
does not have the major that
students
wants
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, absolutely
students
will go
study
abroad.
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, there is
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a nigerian
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nigerian
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Nigerian
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student
who
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is interest
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interest
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interests
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study
on sexology.
however
, in
negeria
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Nigeria
does
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not have the major,
as
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and as
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a
result
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he/she has to go to
other
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another country
other countries
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country
to
study
it.
that is
why
take
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a
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the
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decision to
study
abroad is important.
Although
become
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becoming
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a
student
in
foreign
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a foreign
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country
has plenty of benefits, it
is
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also
has
a drawbacks
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drawbacks
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. Costs of
study
is
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one of them.
For instance
, to
study
abroad,
students
have to rent a room as they live in
other
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another country
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country
.
Next
, usually for foreign
students
, the
student
fee is more expensive so
students
have to pay extra. Another disadvantage is
students
have to deal with
different
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a different
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environment
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environments
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that
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than
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they used to have in their
homecountry
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home country
. in
this
case, many
differents
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different
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culture
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cultures
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may
effect
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affect
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they
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their
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study
.
This
essay
have
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explain
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explained
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about benefits and drawbacks of
study
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studying
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abroad. in my opinion, even though
study
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studying
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overseas has drawbacks,
but
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apply
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it is the
challanges
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challenges
challenge
that people have to face and
through
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apply
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in order to get more
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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and
experiences
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experience
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.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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