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governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #railways #roads
For decades, it has been discussing the possible facilities of public
transportations
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transportation
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, and huge highways investment around the
differenet
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different
countinents
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continents
.
Nevertheless
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 highways and main roads are correlated
wtih
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with
 our
dailylife
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daily life
 for a long time,
some
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and some
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 global
administratives
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administrative
 demand more routes for
trains
 rather
then
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than
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cars
. In fact, policymakers should increase the sources and investments in the projects for
trains
 since providing more affordable
transportaton
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transportation
 opportunities and establishing sustainable cities.
Initially
, there are some people in
the
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apply
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society that can not utilize from
investements
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investments
that
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provided by the state.
For instance
, for students in
the
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undevelepoed
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undeveloped
 countries, and poor people it is much more
usefull
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useful
 to use public
trasportation
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transportation
such
 as
trains
.
Consider
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 the overprices of plane tickets and
gassoline
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gasoline
 for
cars
, train systems enable
affordable
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an affordable
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way
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ways
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 to go through somewhere for people with
lack
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a lack
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 of capital.
On the other hand
, for a while, market prices of vehicles are increasing, slightly.
In particular
, when we include the countries that
has
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higly
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high
 inflation rates, the market prices are sharply boosted for middle-class folks that would will a car to use
instead
 of
train
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a train
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 system. All in all, these two economical aspects of the issue are just
the
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 small part of the big
pictues
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pictures
picture
 where we can observe more problematic ideas. Yes, the
arguements
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arguments
that
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provided above are essential, but there is another overview point that should be mentioned. It is
a
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establishing sustainable cities and counties for current local residents and future generations. If
administratives
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administrators
 use their sources and
fonds
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funds
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toward
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to improve railways, there might appear friendly and liveable
ristricts
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restricts
districts
, areas and continents. Consider how European
countries
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country's
countries'
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 wealth and happiness level is sustained thanks to the services provided by their governments. Their
urbans
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urban
turbans
 have
constracted
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constructed
contracted
wtih
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with
within
the
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respect
of
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for
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 human dignity since
20th
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the 20th
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 century ,
where
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when
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 all the revolutions
completed
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were completed
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, to
achive
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achieve
 that aim they
establised
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established
 railways all around the
europe
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Europe
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 continent.
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A
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The
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 result of
this
 achievement, nowadays
european
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European
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 citizens can
easly
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easily
 travel around their continents
by
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with
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 just
small
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a small
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 amount of fees for transportation and they have protected the
enviroment
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environment
 by avoiding creating huge highways for
cars
. To sum up, the idea of sustainable
develepoment
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development
demand
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demands
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 decreasing the number of
investment
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investments
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 in roads to catch the improvement in public transportation system along
trains
. In conclusion,
due to
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supporting arguments
such
 as reachable options for everyone via
trains
 and achieving the goal of
sustainable
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a sustainable
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life style
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lifestyle
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are
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strongly give us
a
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an
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 overview
in
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of
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 the idea of using
states
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state
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 capital for
trains
instead
 of building new routes for
cars
. On a final note of debate, It would be taken into account to install some
trains
 that
runs
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run
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by
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on
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 sustainable energy, and high level of
technologys
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technology
technologies
 that we can utilize, frequently.
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  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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