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the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

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The two bar charts illustrate the trends in the percentages of buying three types of appliances and the condition of how much time people in a country use for housework every week between 1920 and 2019. Overall, the percentages of people owned washing
machines
,
refrigerators
 and
vacuum
cleaners
 all see a going up trend.
However
, the time people spend on housework per week witnessed a steadily falling trend, it decreased from 50 hours to 10 hours until 2019. In 1920, the ratio of owners with washing
machines
 was 40%, while that with
refrigerators
 and
vacuum
cleaners
were
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 30% and 2% respectively. While in 2019, the number of families that owned
refrigerators
 and
vacuum
cleaners
 both account for 100%, and that of washing machine owners rise up to 75%. The percentage of households with
refrigerators
 rose rapidly between 1920 - 1960. It exceed the number of families with
vacuum
cleaners
 to 55% in 1940 and
then
 exceed that with washing
machines
 to 90% in 1960.
In addition
,The ratio of owners of
vacuum
cleaners
 reach the number of households with washing
machines
 at 70% in 1960.
Furthermore
, the percentage of families who bought a washing machine fall slightly to 65% in 1980, and
then
 rose back to 60% by 2000.
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