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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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The spread of internet consumption will eventually cause all stores in urban and suburban areas to seize to exist. In my opinion, I agree that online shopping is more convenient for my life.
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 essay argues that the influence of online shopping is more helpful in my busy and hectic lifestyle and allows me to extend
option
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 of buying preferred items
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which
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when
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 I have no time
walk
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 through the malls.
First
, the biggest advantage of e-commerce is convenience. We can comfortably shop at midnight while in our
pajamas
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. There are no lines to wait in or cashiers to track down to help with purchasing, and we can do our shopping in minutes.
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, cheap deals, and better prices are available online
,
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 because products come to direct from the manufacturer or seller without involving middlemen. Plus, it's easier to compare prices and find a better deal. Many online sites offer discount coupons and rebates, as well.
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, when I want to buy a new television, I only compare
price
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 between many stores with
same
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a
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product which comes with a global manufacturer's warranty.
Second
, it is more variety for choosing, buyers can find almost any brand or item which they are looking for. People can shop from retailers in other parts of the state, country, or even the world
instead
 of being limited to their own geography. A far greater selection of
colors
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 and sizes than when customers will find locally are at your disposal. Sending gifts to relatives and friends is easy, no matter where they are. All the packaging and shipping are done for everybody.
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, on my friend ’s birthday, I can not fly to Da Nang city to join
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her, I ordered the dress which she likes best and sent it to her on
this
 day. She was very happy. On the whole,
on
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one
hand
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 technology has made the life of many
working class
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 people simpler and youth prefer to get things digitally.
However
, that will not
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 to all shops in towns and cities closing because still different people prefer to go to shopping complexes and retail outlets
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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