In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount that people can earn.Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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people
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believe that high
wage
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has benefits for the country. Whereas a group of
people
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earn a
lot
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money.
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others consider that the government should organize the amount of
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wage
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wages
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. In my
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a
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must be equal for all the
people
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who are working well. Some professions
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as judge, economist, lawyer, detective and engineer get high
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salary
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salaries
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in most
of
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the
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countries. Because
these kind
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of jobs demands a
lot
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skill and they should be responsible for their work field.
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they deserve to get
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a high
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amount of
wage
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, the most paying work is
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judge and their average earning is almost 8 million
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rug rugs
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because it is
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hard and respectful profession,
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, it is unfair to others who are doing
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though
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labor
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that demands their physical skill. The
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doing manual work and other majors
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as teacher, doctor,
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and office
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workers
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a bad
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in a month. Especially teachers and doctors earn about 1 million to 1.2 million
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rug rugs
in Mongolia. But education and
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the medical
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sector is the most important field for all the
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who are living
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this
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country. All in all,
government
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the government
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should control their earnings and implement the
salary
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law for
the
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all
human
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humans
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equally. The extremely high
salary
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should be reduced and the poor
wage
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must be increased to a certain
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.
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, it is good for
people
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to live with satisfaction and feel happy
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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