Sending criminals to prison is not the best method of dealing with them. Education and job training are better ways to help them do you agree or disagree?

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my perspective sending
criminals
to
jail
is the best idea but
law
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the law
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should have proper evidence that
criminal
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a criminal
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is guilty and
their
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there
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should not treat
criminals
extremely harshly like mental and physical torture and
their
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should give proper
facility
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facilities
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to
criminals
like basic needs.
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the
law
should
held
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responsible
for
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apply
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criminals
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criminals'
criminal's
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families
their
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should care for the families.
Criminals
should get proper
jail
or proper food and
their
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should be given
place
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a place
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neat and tidy.
Criminals
should get
good
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education while staying in
jail
and
the
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apply
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criminals
should be given
very
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the very
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good
job
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jobs
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if
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they
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have completed their education in
jail
.
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instance
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if
criminal
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the criminal
a criminal
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is guilty
for
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of
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rape, murder etc if
evidence
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the evidence
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is exactly true the criminal should get
death
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the death
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penalty.
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in
india
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many
mla
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MLA
sons proven guilty will get proper
facility
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facilities
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like good food, clothes all necessary activities etc Common
criminal
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criminals
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always get ignored by
law
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the law
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.
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should
be threaten
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same
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the same
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way. Let's elaborate many
criminal
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criminals
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only do
odd
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the odd
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job
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jobs
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in
jail
like their cook food
clean
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cleaning
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toilet
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toilets
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cut
woods
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wood
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.
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my
view
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i
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I
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completely agree with
this
statement.
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the government
law
should allow
criminal
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criminals
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to get fresh air and should allow
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them to
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to meet
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meeting
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the
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their
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family. If
criminal
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criminals
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having
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have
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small kids and wife
law
should help their family members. In many cases
criminals
kids stop going to school and do odd jobs for family needs. kids get bullied by their classmates for their
father
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fathers
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wrong doing
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wrongdoing
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.
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  • Vocational training
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  • Deterrent
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