Cutting down forests is a real environmental threat, yet, this is still happening at a great rate around the world. Why do you think forests are being destroyed? Are there any benefits from the destruction of forests?

It is a cruel reality
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the
forest
lands reduced by deforestation year by year. I think that
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phenomenons
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of our society obtained
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it and it is damaging not only our present
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but
also
future
generations. The advance of new technologies provided with the
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possibility
to process more quantity of wood that
then
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transformed
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paper
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.
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every time faster, allowing to
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more
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paper products in less time, which means the machines can cut more trees faster.
As a result
of
this
,
for example
, we can see today the Amazon
forest
reduce every year more and more. Studies from the University of Brazil had shown that
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rainfores
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rainforest
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been reduced by 40
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in the
last
30 years.
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, the negative impact
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the reduction of the
forest
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is affecting the
future
of species that are actually in
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extinction
.
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, it is
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the
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climat
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climate
changes,
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because
there are not
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trees that produce
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oxygen
and
this
is affecting every day more the world's temperature levels. The
forest
are
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been destroyed for
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economic reasons and there is not
enought
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enough
control from the
goverments
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governments
government
to stop
this
traggic
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tragic
reality. The only benefit that
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from the destruction of the
forest
is the economic
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that certain companies have from producing paper items and the
ilegal
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illegal
enrichment of
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certain
political sectors that do not
stablish
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establish
strict rules that protect the natural habitat of so many animals and plants. In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is now more than ever
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necessarily
to act
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responsibly
and demand
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more international's politics of protection
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the natural habitat. If all sectors work together and join forces, the
future
of our planet might have a chance to restore what
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has been destroyed for so many years and
future
generaltions
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generations
will have the opportunity to enjoy a better world.
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  • deforestation
  • agricultural expansion
  • commercial logging
  • urban sprawl
  • climate change
  • economic activity
  • infrastructure projects
  • sustainable development
  • environmental degradation
  • renewable resources
  • biodiversity loss
  • ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • conservation efforts
  • carbon footprint
  • afforestation
  • renewable resources
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