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Some people get into debt by buying they don’t need and can’t afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What action can be taken to prevent from having this problem?

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Nowadays, is known that some people have started to suffer falling
in
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debts
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debt
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 because they
are not totally realize
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of
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how many buyings are doing. After that,
this
 population can not repay the money back and they just can borrow
to
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from
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 banks.
First
 of all, the biggest main reason
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this
 behaviour is that
this
 community do not notice their expenditure.
For example
, we know of a lot of younger spending cash with not necessary things like
play
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 games or other kinds of expensive
techonologies
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technologies
.
Moreover
,
this
 group are not conscious
about
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 the consequence that
this
 will produce and for
this
 reason they are just buying and buying without thinking much.
For instance
, when the shops are starting to put
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lot of offers they can not resist
to
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it. Indeed,
these
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the
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 public
do
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does
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 not have
idea
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any idea
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 about what they are doing with the coins.
Nevertheless
, we can apply some preventions in order to help these younger.
Hence
, starting to teach in our schools about finance,
bussines
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business
 and how
use
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 in a good way the money.
For instance
, we can see these subjects in a lot of universities because they are useful in order to work in companies in the future.
However
, many do not want to follow
studing
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studying
 and have finished their studies in
the
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secondary school. For
this
 reason, is very important starting to teach these
type
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types
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 of subjects during
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secondary school. Many agree that we can find some benefits
doing
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 that.
Moreover
, if government start to apply some laws
upon
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the
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marketing, we will see big benefits,
such
 as, people can start to minister their money in a better way. To conclude, some people do not know how
use
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the
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cash correctly and we need to be preventive putting new subjects in our schools and with the
government
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government's
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 help.
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