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It is not necessary for people to travel to other places to learn about the culture. We can learn as much as from books, films and the Internet. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

#people #travel #places #culture #books #films #internet
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The discussion of travelling across the globe is surely one that begs the question of exactly how it can help
people
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 explore different
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. It is often argued by some
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 that we can explore the most about various
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 from movies,
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 and the web.
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 is of the utmost importance to explore distinct
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. One clear fact is that we cannot get to know about the customs and
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 of different regions until we visit these
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 and meet different
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 residing there.
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 the information available on the internet and in
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 is not complete and even misleading sometimes.
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, to have a clear understanding of any new culture visiting that place is in itself a beautiful experience. Many college students,
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, in Germany choose exchange programs to study in a completely new place and explore their unique
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. Supporting my argument
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, I believe that when individuals travel across different
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, they feel more confident and learn to accept new
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.
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 talking verbally to
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 is an event which cannot be experienced via reading
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 or through the internet.
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, one can explore various food cuisines and can
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 understand the spiritual preferences of different
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. To cite an example, many South Asian travellers explore hidden regions to experience new foods and languages of
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 staying there. To conclude, in my opinion, reading
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 and watching films are inefficient ways to educate
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 about distinct
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; due to the lack of real-life events and incomplete information.
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, I firmly believe that exploring new
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 can make
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 confident and more accepting of different
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural immersion
  • authentic experiences
  • diverse perspectives
  • comprehensive
  • historical context
  • facilitates
  • sensory and emotional depth
  • holistic understanding
  • cultural bias
  • stereotypes
  • discernment
  • virtual reality
  • convenience of access
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