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All museums and art galleries should be free because they are an important part of a country's culture. How far do you agree with this statement?

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Tourism is a major driver for the economies of several countries,
for instance
, Sri Lanka, Mauritius, The Bahamas, etc.
People
 come to these countries for a vacation and
also
 to learn about the country’s
culture
 by visiting national monuments,
art
galleries
,
museums
, etc.
Thus
 the question arises, should
the
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entry
 to
art
galleries
 and
museums
 be free?
Art
galleries
 and
museums
 can serve as a source of income
to
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 the government or the organisation owning
it
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them
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.
Also
, these structures need regular maintenance to keep them up to date and without a fee, it can become difficult to arrange
required
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 money to maintain them.
In addition
 to
this
, if the
art
 gallery or museum becomes a success, the revenue emanating from it can not only be used to expand existing infrastructure but
also
 build new
such
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structures.
However
, apart from tourists, the local public should
also
 be taken into account. The local
people
 may not be able to afford the
entry
 fee, especially those of a developing country and
thus
 may miss out on important information about their motherland. A youngster missing out, on
such
 information may be found wanting during discussions on the
culture
 of his homeland when he visits foreign countries for study or work.
Moreover
, with
people
 tending to adopt foreign
culture
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 easily these days, it is critical that the home
culture
 is infused in them to preserve the integrity and originality of a nation. All of these can be encouraged by making
entry
 to
museums
 and
art
galleries
 free to local
people
. Apart from
this
, for students, it becomes easy to relate to the characters and events in their history books when they see them portrayed in the gallery or museum. Schools can organise free trips as part of learning series to these places. In conclusion, I strongly feel that
the
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entry
 to
museums
 and
art
galleries
 should be free as they are an important part of a country’s
culture
. The maintenance of these structures can be sponsored through individual donations or government support.
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