Some working parents believe childcare centers can provide best care for children, while others think family members like grandparents can do it better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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public, the topic of which is the best way of taking
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of
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is frequently discussed. While I agree that
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have better facilities for
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, I believe grandparents can
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help to contribute. On the one hand, it is no doubt that professional
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have advantages with regard to
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of all, as the organizations continue hiring qualified teachers, nurses and doctors,
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can receive professional education as well as
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,
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on scientific research ensures youngsters
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all
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they needed daily. It is critical for youngsters who are rapidly growing up.
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, youths can learn how to socialize with other kids in the
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place, which is an important skill when they participate in
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market.
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, receiving education and
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from grandparents has certain positive impacts too. With full life experience and knowledge,
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could learn more about
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and
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-hand life lessons from old generations which are difficult to access, but extremely valuable for them.
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, if parents could borrow grandparents’ hands, money could be saved for other activities,
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as attending sports clubs and going
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an oversea summer camp. In my opinion, both
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and grandparents have their unique value in terms of taking
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of the
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generation. It would be ideal to leverage them both,
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, working parents could send kids to their grandparents’ places for
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days a week or weekends while maintaining a
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schedule of going to the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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