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Tourism is becoming a good source of revenue for many conutries. Discuss the advantages and the disadvantages of developing this industry.

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It is true that many
countries
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 earn their revenues from travellers. Since the world has become globalization,
tourism
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 has grown in no time. For better or worse, both individuals and societies are influenced by
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 change. The benefits from the growing popularity of
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 seem attractive. Well-developed
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 could provide a good impression of the country to foreigners.
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, Japan, one of the most popular
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 for a tour, offers convenience and kindness to travellers so
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 leads foreigners to have a reliable image of Japan.
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, many tourists spend a lot of money on products and services
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 as souvenirs, restaurants, accommodation, etc.
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 people who are self-employed would be better off and the country would be able to collect more taxes if there is good infrastructure for tourists.
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, there are drawbacks that we should not overlook. If we rely on
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 industry too much, it would cause serious economical problems. During recent 3 years, most people were not able to travel to other
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 since Covid 19 has spread throughout the world.
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,
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 that earn the majority of revenues from
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 sectors underwent a financial crisis. When it comes to individuals, some locals complain about overcrowded public facilities and hospitality areas, as the number of travellers increases. Some are
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 wary of troubles between residents and strangers who do not know the laws and regulations of the community. In conclusion, investing in
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 industry helps nations and the country to economical aspect, but we should not overlook its dangerous potential and nations' concerns.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Revenue generation
  • Job creation
  • Economic stimulus
  • Cultural heritage
  • Heritage conservation
  • Infrastructure upgrades
  • Environmental degradation
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Commodification
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Economic volatility
  • Global market fluctuations
  • Transport advancements
  • Hospitality industry
  • Public service improvement
  • Ecological footprint
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