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Some people have the opinion that big shopping malls are expensive places as they offer high costs for the products which can be bought at much cheaper prices from local shops. On the other hand, some people think that such malls are absolutely the best places to visit for shopping. Discuss both the opinions and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your ans

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Introduction
People
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 have their own
reference
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references
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of
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for
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place
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places
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 to buy the
products
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 they want. some crowd prefer to
shop
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 in a big shopping mall meanwhile some others choose to
shop
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 in local shops. there is an opinion
says
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that says
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, in terms of buying a
product
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, big shopping
malls
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 are more expensive than local shops.
this
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 essay will discuss
about
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this
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percepective
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perspective
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Body paragraph 1
generally, big shopping
malls
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offer
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a
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apply
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various
types
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 of
products
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 to buy. there are a lot of things from different
types
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 of brands in the
malls
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.
people
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 often choose to
shop
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 in
malls
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 because they can search
anything
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for anything
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 they want
such
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 as clothes,
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and makeups
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makeups
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makeup
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, or even they can
fulfill
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 their basic needs there.
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because
beacuse
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Because
 of that,
people
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 choose to go to big
malls
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even though
eventhough
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even though
 sometimes is more expensive than
local
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the local
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store
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 but because of the availability of these
malls
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 they prefer to be here
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on the other hand
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,
local
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the local
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shop
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shops
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 usually
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offer
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offers
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 a specific
product
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 to sell.
for example
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,
some
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certain brand
build
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builds
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 their own
store
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. they build it only to sell their
apparels
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apparel
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. they might not
sells
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sell
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a
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apply
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different
types
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 of
product
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 like most
of
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big
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the big
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 shopping
malls
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 do. but if we are talking about the quality of
products
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 these local shops sell, they
offer
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a
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apply
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good quality
products
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 as
good
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well
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 as others in shopping
malls
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 but cheaper.
Conclusion
to conclude, both big shopping
malls
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 and local
store
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 have their own
speciallity
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speciality
. big shopping
malls
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offer
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 a complete
availibilty
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availability
 of
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product
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products
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 you might searching for. local
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store
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stores
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offer
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a
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apply
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limited
types
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 of
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product
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products
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 but
it
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they
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 can be cheaper than in the big
malls
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.
people
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 can choose where to go
depend
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depending
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 on what they are searching for.

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