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Some people have the opinion that big shopping malls are expensive places as they offer high costs for the products which can be bought at much cheaper prices from local shops. On the other hand, some people think that such malls are absolutely the best places to visit for shopping. Discuss both the opinions and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your ans

#people #malls #places #offer #costs #products #prices #shops #hand #visit #ans
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 have their own
reference
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of
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place
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places
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 to buy the
products
 they want. some crowd prefer to
shop
 in a big shopping mall meanwhile some others choose to
shop
 in local shops. there is an opinion
says
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that says
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, in terms of buying a
product
, big shopping
malls
 are more expensive than local shops.
this
 essay will discuss
about
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this
percepective
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perspective
. generally, big shopping
malls
offer
a
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apply
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various
types
 of
products
 to buy. there are a lot of things from different
types
 of brands in the
malls
.
people
 often choose to
shop
 in
malls
 because they can search
anything
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for anything
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 they want
such
 as clothes,
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and makeups
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makeups
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, or even they can
fulfill
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 their basic needs there.
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because
beacuse
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Because
 of that,
people
 choose to go to big
malls
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even though
eventhough
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even though
 sometimes is more expensive than
local
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the local
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store
 but because of the availability of these
malls
 they prefer to be here
on the other hand
,
local
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the local
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shop
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shops
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 usually
offer
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offers
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 a specific
product
 to sell.
for example
,
some
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apply
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certain brand
build
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builds
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 their own
store
. they build it only to sell their
apparels
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apparel
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. they might not
sells
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sell
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a
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different
types
 of
product
 like most
of
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apply
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big
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the big
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 shopping
malls
 do. but if we are talking about the quality of
products
 these local shops sell, they
offer
a
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good quality
products
 as
good
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well
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 as others in shopping
malls
 but cheaper. to conclude, both big shopping
malls
 and local
store
 have their own
speciallity
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speciality
. big shopping
malls
offer
 a complete
availibilty
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availability
 of
product
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products
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 you might searching for. local
store
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stores
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offer
a
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apply
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limited
types
 of
product
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products
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 but
it
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they
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 can be cheaper than in the big
malls
.
people
 can choose where to go
depend
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depending
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 on what they are searching for.
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