You have seen an advertisement in an Australian Magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-years old Child. Write a letter to the parents, in your letters • Explain why you would like the job • Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ • Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear mom and dad, I'm writing to you because I'm very excited! I applied for a babysitter job in Australia. If I get the job, I will be there for 6 months. Those parents are looking for a babysitter for their six-year-old child. As you know, I keep up with children very well, they love me!

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child is interested in musicals, so I believe we would spend quite a lovely time. I worked as a clown while I was a student so, I believe I can impress the child. The salary is not high

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, I'll live with the family so my expenses won't be too high. If you remember, I always imagined seeing Australia and New Zealand,

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is a really nice opportunity for me. I won't work at weekends so I plan to travel around these countries. My favourite director Taika Waiti has a workshop during that time, I definitely go there because I want to meet him so badly. I hope, I could get the job, wish me good luck. Best wishes, Elif Beyza.

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