Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Since the industrial revolution,

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has started to be used in many

differents

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process and activities, and the use of

computer

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a computer

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couldn't be different. In

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, computers started to be seen as an important item to have in classrooms, since they

provides

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quickly

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information and different teaching approaches. With the growing use of them, many teaching

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possibilities

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appers

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appear

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, as programs that would help the student to perform something that in hand execution would take more time, so, it gives more efficiency and

effectivitly

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effectively

effectivity

to different

taks

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tasks

and activities. The

computer

's utilization can bring many benefits to a classroom,

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example, the visualization of a

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in a 3D form without the knowledge of how to draw. In my civil engineering graduation, we used a program to draw houses, and

this

allowed us to do it quickly, in

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comparison

to the hand way.

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, if the students

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the programs in an automatic way, without

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thinking

and reflecting

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the reasons to do that,

these machine

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can

genarate

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generate

a dependency.

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, the Excel program is very used to perform several maths activities and to generate

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graphs

grapes

. But, if the student doesn't learn the

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formula

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works he will always depend

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the programs.

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my graduation, I had to learn how a wood structure would react to several winds, so,

first

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us how to calculate by hand, and after we started to use

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program, to accelerate the maths.

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approach allowed us to learn how to calculate and after we reproduced that in the

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, using it in a good way.

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, the

computer

's utilization for teaching purposes is very

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important

, but with

consciency

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conscience

consistency

. The teacher and the student must assure

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that the

computer

is helping them to perform an activity and not doing

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itself.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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307 words

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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Many people today are worried about the large quantities of waste produced by ordinary households. What problems are caused by household waste, and what solutions may be possible in both the short and the long term?

It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their friends and families. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.