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Summarise the information about the process of making carbonated drinks by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram represents five stages that must be
fallowed
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followed
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 to produce carbonated drinks. The process starts with the drink in
water
 format and ends with the carbonated drink
been
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 delivered. The
fisrt
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first
 step is to
colect
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collect
 and clean the
water
,
that
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which
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 pass by a filter to purify
its
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it
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. The
next
 stage is heating evaporation and carbonation, where the
water
pass
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passes
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 by heaters and in
sequency
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sequence
, the carbon dioxide is
addicioned
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addition
addiction
 to the
water
 in a tank. Succeeding that, the
water
 goes to a tank with the
colorante
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colourant
colourants
, the syrup and the
flavor
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flavour
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. After these
ingredient's
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ingredients'
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insertion
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 the tanks pass through a mixing step and
is
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are
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sended
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sent
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 to a filter. With these stages
completeded
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completed
, the product is ready and the machine starts to fill the bottles and cans, to the drink
be
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is
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 ready
to
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for
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consumation
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consumption
consummation
. With the production process completed, the drinks can be packaged and
sended
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sent
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 to the final clients,
as
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such as
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 the supermarket as an example.
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