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The two tables below show statistics of workers of foreign and US birth in the United States last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The two tables compare from
last
 year the
number
 of
workers
 in the US that were of US
birth
 to the
number
 of
workers
 who were of foreign
birth
. The tables include divisions of the
workforce
 by gender and by age, summarising the total
number
 of
workers
 in the
workforce
, the
number
 of employed and unemployed
workers
 and
finally
 the
unemployment
rate
. All figures are in thousands. Overall, it can be seen that in spite of the much larger numbers involved with the US
birth
workforce
, the total
unemployment
 rates were quite similar for the two cohorts. When looking at the breakdown of the figures by gender, the male
foreign-birthbirth
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foreign-birth birth
workforce
 suffered a lower unemploy,emt
rate
 (8.9%) than the male US
birth
workforce
 (10.6%), whereas the female
foreign-birthbirth
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foreign-birth birth
workforce
 suffered a higher
unemployment
rate
 (11.1%) than the female US
birth
workforce
 (8.5%). Overall, the
foreign-birthbirth
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foreign-birth birth
workforce
 suffered a marginally higher
rate
 of
unemployment
 (9.8%) than the
US-birthbirth
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US-birth birth
workforce
 (9.6%). The total US
birth
workforce
 in size was significantly larger (129,533 people) than the total foreign
birth
workforce
 (24,357 people). When looking at the breakdown of the figures by age, the younger of the
foreign-birthbirth
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foreign-birth birth
workforce
 ( 16 - 24 and 25 - 34) suffered from lower
unemployment
 rates than the
workforce
 of native
birth
,
however
, the foreign
workforce
 older than these bands suffered higher
unemployment
 rates.
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