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The two tables below show statistics of workers of foreign and US birth in the United States last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The two tables compare from
last
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 year the
number
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 of
workers
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 in the US that were of US
birth
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 to the
number
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 of
workers
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 who were of foreign
birth
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. The tables include divisions of the
workforce
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 by gender and by age, summarising the total
number
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 of
workers
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 in the
workforce
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, the
number
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 of employed and unemployed
workers
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 and
finally
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 the
unemployment
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rate
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. All figures are in thousands. Overall, it can be seen that in spite of the much larger numbers involved with the US
birth
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workforce
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, the total
unemployment
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 rates were quite similar for the two cohorts. When looking at the breakdown of the figures by gender, the male
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foreign-birthbirth
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foreign-birth birth
workforce
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 suffered a lower unemploy,emt
rate
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 (8.9%) than the male US
birth
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workforce
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 (10.6%), whereas the female
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foreign-birthbirth
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foreign-birth birth
workforce
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 suffered a higher
unemployment
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rate
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 (11.1%) than the female US
birth
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workforce
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 (8.5%). Overall, the
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foreign-birthbirth
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foreign-birth birth
workforce
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 suffered a marginally higher
rate
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 of
unemployment
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 (9.8%) than the
US-birthbirth
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US-birth birth
workforce
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 (9.6%). The total US
birth
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workforce
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 in size was significantly larger (129,533 people) than the total foreign
birth
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workforce
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 (24,357 people). When looking at the breakdown of the figures by age, the younger of the
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foreign-birthbirth
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foreign-birth birth
workforce
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 ( 16 - 24 and 25 - 34) suffered from lower
unemployment
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 rates than the
workforce
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 of native
birth
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,
however
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, the foreign
workforce
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 older than these bands suffered higher
unemployment
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 rates.
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