Subjects like arts, music and drama are more important than other subjects and therefore should be given more time in the calendar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Art
subjects
such
as drama, music, acting and dancing are fundamental that enrich our lives.
Nevertheless
,
majority
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of parents say schools must concentrate on teaching more academic
subjects
, like math, science, history and literature. In my view, both
art
and academic
subjects
should be taught equally.
In contrast
, academic
subjects
are more required when we get into
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higher education. Academic knowledge
have
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main point in
academic
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world.
Consequently
, we should
be
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assess our academic ability which we taught from academic
subjects
, not
art
subjects
.
In other words
, for passing into university or high school owning educational intelligence is rather profitable .
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the
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result, many people send their children to educational
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for studying academic
subjects
deeply.
On the other hand
,
art
subjects
can improve
the
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creativity and flexibility in people.
Painting
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The painting
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which
include
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relaxing and anti-stressing effects
makes
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you more relaxin that's why you feel
yourself
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extremely softened.
Also
, in modern
life
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most of
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the works
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works
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are done by robots replacing humans.
However
, in creativity people couldn't
be displace
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by them. In conclusion,
art
and academic
subjects
should educate in a school's program in a balanced way.
Art
classes should be encouraged as well as academic classes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stimulate creativity
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Emotional and social benefits
  • Self-expression
  • Cultural appreciation
  • Global citizenship
  • Balanced education
  • Diverse career paths
  • Stress reduction
  • Mental well-being
  • Talent nurturing
  • Substantial career opportunities
  • Arts-based subjects
  • Confidence building
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