Modern technology is now very common in most workplaces. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

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and move to
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city
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to live and work because they think
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small villages.
However
, many
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so living in the countryside
also
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the primacy and drawbacks when you live in a small community. There are a lot of reasons why small community, some of them are that the atmosphere here is very peaceful
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and that the people who live here are very sociable.
In contrast
, if you live in a big
city
, you will have to face busy
life
, polluted air and
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traffic
jams at rush hour.
In addition
, when you live in
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village, you don't need to for food, vegetable or fruit because you can in your garden.
Thus
, having a peaceful
life
in the countryside is one of the good choices when you feel bored with
city
life
.
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the advantages of living in a small
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it
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modern, there are few universities so
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students have to leave home to study in the
city
and job opportunities are still low.
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,
life
here is so quiet and few exercises so it
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for people to develop themselves. To sum up, living in a small village has more benefits and
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disadvantages
so you should choose
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want to live here.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • software applications
  • high-speed internet
  • communication
  • collaboration
  • geographical boundaries
  • remote work
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • skill gaps
  • job displacement
  • automation
  • artificial intelligence
  • dependency
  • security risks
  • data breaches
  • cyber attacks
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