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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.

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The two bar charts indicate information regarding the number of married and divorced
people
 over a
period
 of 30 years in America and the proportion in terms of the status of never married, married, widowed and divorced. It is noticeable that the figure for the number of marriages in the USA decreased gradually over the
period
 from 1970 to 2000, which dropped from 2.5
million
 to 2
million
. Meanwhile, no matter 1970 or 2000, the percentage of married Americans is obviously high than that of
people
 being in the rest three
status
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. According to the
first
 diagram, we can see that the figure for married
people
 remained stable at around 2.5
million
 between 1970 and 1980,
then
 there was a drop continually to 2
million
 during the
next
 20 years.
However
, the number of divorces reached a peak at approximately 1.4
million
 in 1980, followed by a decline over the 20-year
period
 from 1980 to 2000. In the total
period
, the gap between marriages and divorces was narrowing.
Moreover
, it can be seen from the
second
 chart that compared with the proportion of never-married persons in 1970, there was a jump at around 5% by 2000, while the percentage of married status reduced in the same
period
, which is nearly 11 per cent.
In addition
, the percentage of divorced
people
 in 2000 was about three times as many as in 1970.
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