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Television programs and movies have become saturated with violent content.What are some resulting social problems and how can we deal with them?

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Movies and series are very popular and easily accessible over the phone.
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, programs can be watched from anywhere and people try recreating the scene with their friends which can be scary and harmful leading to injuries.
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, it is becoming a problem for the community and I will
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 a situation. With the boom of the internet, digital
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 is easily accessible over the phone, personal computers and television which are quite violent and can disturb
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 thought processes Individuals will try to create a similar scene in public places without realising the harm it will bring to themselves and others. Violent
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 should give prior warnings to the viewers of the effects that may have on them. Adults to ensure that they do not watch harmful
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 when they are around children. Certain clips should be blocked or removed from the series. In conclusion, the above points should help deal with violent
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 in our community.
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