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Overeating is a more widespread problem in the world in comparison to hunger. Why overeating is more important than hunger? What can we do to tackle overeating?

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While many experts are concerned with the
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 of hunger, in reality, overeating is a more widespread issue.
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 pressing question to be dealt with and propose a few possible solutions. Health issues and environmental degradation are the main reasons why we argue that the overeating issue deserves more attention than hunger. People, who regularly overeat, are more likely to suffer from health problems,
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 as chronic heart and stomach diseases. At the same time, excessive
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 consumption increases demands on
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limited natural resources. As an example of
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, we could mention crops and meat producers, who convert tropical forests into land suitable for agriculture at increasing rates. There are measures to be taken to combat
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problem
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.
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, better education, particularly on the topic of healthy diets, will enable people to consciously buy
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food
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the food
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 that they really need.
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, increasing the
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 quality could potentially decrease the total amount of the
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 supply needed.
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, fast
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, containing high amounts of sugar, is processed by the body fairly quickly and the
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 portion is required
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 increased
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 consumption. In conclusion, it has been shown that dealing with
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problem
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 is more important than the
problem
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 of hunger due to its negative impact on the environment, as well as, the health of the population. Two possible solutions have been proposed. Better
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 quality is a way to decrease
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 of
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 needed by society. More education programmes as a measure to help consumers to make informed decisions.

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