Some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to broadcast foreign films and TV shows. Others, however, think it is best to produce local films and shows. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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easy to
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any entertainment around the
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people
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can watch some movies, series or TV
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technology.
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been
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to
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local entertainment
firm
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have
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vary
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competitors in
this
industry.
Firstly
, many international movies or show with we called "Big Film Cinema" are
extreamly
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extremely
popular
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foreign
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nation
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.
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, Marvel
have
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many fans around the
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variety
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content
and
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we
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called
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"Marvel
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the "Marvel
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Universe". It can
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high value
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with others in
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industry. The benefit for
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this
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are improve
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expecially
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especially
in "English" because
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will make
thier
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their
movie
with simple language convey to easier for understanding to many
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. And
also
, they will make them with global traditional
such
as
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festivals and at the same time they can expose
thier
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their
custom to globalize.
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too.
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the other hand, when
people
like to watch and follow international
content
more than local. It really impacts
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local firms
in
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the
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strongly
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way.
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, local firm
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have enough fund to improve their
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customer need and it
make
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some boring too. In my point of view, I think
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company
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to
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adapt their story to match
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the
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modern
needed
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because
in
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currently
the
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movie
watcher have many
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to choose and if they won't develop it will make
a
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drawback to them.
For
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the
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conclusion,
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a customer
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customer
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customers
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from around the
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have
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many
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to choose more than
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a movie
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movie
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movies
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from
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international or local. It will be having from any social or entertainment platform. Some
people
don't like to watch
long
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movie
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movies
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but like only short
content
in reels or TikTok. Those must
to
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develop their
content
to match with
customer
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customers
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required to make a survival.
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