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News media is more influential nowadays. Some people think it is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Media
 become more popular all over the world.Some people believe that TV and the press have made a bad role in our lives.
On the other hand
,Some people think
News
media
 helps modern life successfully to progress. In my opinion, I will argue that both
view
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 are almost correct. The press, In ,wars can change facts and lead countries to win their wars.
For example
, some Newspapers publish their countries won and
that is
 totally not true.
Moreover
 , some
news
give
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 wrong information about stocks or the economy to achieve political goals .You can not see or read any
News
 that real goal sometimes they want to control their readers or lead them to something that benefits another group . Nowadays, it is hard to find a press that does not have a purpose,,
However
 still there
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 fewer presses that
struggles
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 to be more honest. these presses lead people to know the truth and reply and give comments . These
News
media
 contribute to and create advanced countries. They help to maintain good educational schools and
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 health sector. To sum up, New
media
 are weapons with two edges.If governments use them in a good way they will make a lot of difference and increase the quality of life.,
However
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,
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 we can each support good
News
media
 if we just watch or read them.
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