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News media is more influential nowadays. Some people think it is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Media
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 become more popular all over the world.Some people believe that TV and the press have made a bad role in our lives.
On the other hand
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,Some people think
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media
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 helps modern life successfully to progress. In my opinion, I will argue that both
view
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 are almost correct. The press, In ,wars can change facts and lead countries to win their wars.
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, some Newspapers publish their countries won and
that is
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 totally not true.
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 , some
news
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give
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 wrong information about stocks or the economy to achieve political goals .You can not see or read any
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 that real goal sometimes they want to control their readers or lead them to something that benefits another group . Nowadays, it is hard to find a press that does not have a purpose,,
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 still there
is
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 fewer presses that
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 to be more honest. these presses lead people to know the truth and reply and give comments . These
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 contribute to and create advanced countries. They help to maintain good educational schools and
perfect
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 health sector. To sum up, New
media
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 are weapons with two edges.If governments use them in a good way they will make a lot of difference and increase the quality of life.,
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as
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apply
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individual
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 we can each support good
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 if we just watch or read them.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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