Some people think that childcare centers provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better careers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion ?

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care

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like their grandfathers and grandmothers in pre-school age rather than

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centers

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essay will discuss both sides and

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give my point of view. Many people think that family is the best way to take care of their

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while they are in

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age. To explain that family

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life since mothers get pregnant, babies

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up. These

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will be people who know

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to others. They will know how to deal with

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, there is no reason why family

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should not raise their children. Those who disagree feel that

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provide the best service for their

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. Their reason is that these

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have a number of

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. humans born with problems and families can not address all issues in their

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face

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a lot of children's concerns and know the effective solutions.

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when she was young, luckily she was at the

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and

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CPR and called the ambulant. In conclusion, having examined the two views, my opinion is that

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would be the best option to consider with.

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is because they know a lot of

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many problems as mentioned. Another obvious plus point is that they can provide our child development

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to standard development.

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are underdeveloped.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

274 words

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Write a letter to a friend about an item you borrowed last week, that accidentally got damaged. In your letter – Describe the item. – What was the damage? – What do you intend to do to rectify the problem?

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