Some people believe that charities should held people in need no matter where those people are in the world. Others feel that these organizations should only serve the people living in the country where they are based.Discuss both sides and give your own view.

These days ,
non governmental
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organisations
play a major role when
assistant
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poor
people
globally. Most
of
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the
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people
have different views regarding
this
matter,while some think
charities
should launch their activities throughout the world others feel those should focus
local
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citizens where
charities
are based .In the following paragraphs ,I intend to discuss both viewpoints and suggest my own view.
Firstly
,most
of
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the non
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non profit
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organisations
are based
on
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developed countries,
such
as USA,UK and Sweden etc. Local citizens in those countries rarely require assistance as they are economically more stable.But
majority
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the majority
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of
people
in poor regions don't get adequate income to fulfil their needs.They always depend on funds
which
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received from
government
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and other helping institutions.
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in India majority don't have proper sanitary facilities. Government alone can not tackle the issue and need assistance from
charities
.
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example
give
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evidence to prove
the
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non governmental
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organisations
may help
people
globally.
Secondly
,Only by helping local citizens
charities
can't gain satisfaction because there
are
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not much to do .Most of these organizations need
satisfaction
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of helping others rather than popularity. To accomplish
this
target ,they should help
people
in various situations.Due to that
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institutions are
willing
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to help globally than locally. To sum up ,it is better to establish
charities
on
global
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basis rather than locally. According to my point of
view
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those
organisations
should be placed to help local
people
and the international.
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