Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

Business progress
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outweighs
other forms of progress?
this
is the question that many governments are driven to ask themselves. Seems to be a strong division between
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think
that is
better
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on improving the economy of the state and who,
instead
, want to think to improve even other aspects that do not involve
money
. In
this
essay I will cover the topic, showing off both thoughts, giving at the end my personal thought. On one side, strong states
such
as
USA
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, Japan,
Russian
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and Russian
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are focused
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economy
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the economy
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, because it is the flower from which they take
the
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lifeblood. Everything is based on
money
. On the other side states
such
as
UK
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the UK
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, even if it really cares to make
money
, it has an eye even
in
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on
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activities that do not involve
money
,
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some
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museums
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, yet
big
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museum
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, are totally free entry.
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art in
UK
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has
a
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huge importance, in
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there are many activities where it is used and shown, even free, as a
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that the state, which is yet focused on
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money
, think
also
to
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the other aspects that are beyond
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them. In my
opinion
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money
are important to lead a country, but it
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relevant to develop other aspects of life
such
as art, as I mentioned before, love, happiness,
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and leisure
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time, since make business is not everything.
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