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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more more popular.

#countries #crime #novels #tv #dramas
In recent years,
the
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crime
stories
 are
becomming
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becoming
 more prevalent because those tales are more appealing
for
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 the
pratons
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protons
prisons
,
especialling
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especially
for
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 the
yourth
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youth
you
fourth
. Along with
criminal
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the criminal
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 novels and TV series surge, their detrimental impacts gradually appear in our community. One of the reasons
of
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criminal
stories
 are more prevalent is that it is easy to be accessed by patrons. In the past, only the
fictions
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fiction
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 which
was
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 published by the publishers could be purchased in the bookstore. Most publishers due to
concerning
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concerns
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 about the legal
responsibalitis
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responsibilities
responsibility
 will evaluate the
stories
first
 to see is there
any
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 potential
nagetive
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negative
 social effects caused before they decide whether or not to publish
it
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.
Therefore
, the
describtions
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descriptions
 of criminal
behavier
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behaviour
 and methods were curbed to
minimum
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.
However
, along with the online bookstores and
vedio
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video
via
 platforms' development, the censor has been eased significantly. So that some
criminal
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stories
 have been published online which could not be accepted by former publishers.
Moreover
, the
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 competition
make
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 it worse.
In
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 my
prespectives
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perspectives
perspective
, surely,
people
 have the right to see or read
the
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criminal
stories
. But
whom
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who
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 could access those materials is
crutial
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crucial
critical
. In fact, Young
people
 and
teenages
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teenagers
 are more likely to watch them, and they
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are inclinate
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inclinate
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incline
inclined
inclination
 to mimic what they see or read because their thoughts are developing and they lack resistance and self-discipline. So we could
easyly
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easily
 get answers from the
statistic
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 data that young
people
 and
teenages
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teenagers
teenage
crime
 rate is raising
drasticly
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drastically
. To solve those issues, we should make
the
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online bookstores, entertainment
platform
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platforms
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, authors and producers accountable for their publishments by implementing strict regulations about which kinds of
storiesthey
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stories they
 could publish and could be accessed by young
people
. In conclusion, I
unstand
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understand
 that
crime
 novels and TV
crime
 series are more
attrective
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attractive
 and profitable.
By producing
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 those kinds of
stories
 will increase their popularity and revenue, but they cannot put their interests above the public interest,
in addition
, they need to know that the benefits and consequences are closely linked.
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