Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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population around the world, more environmental problems have risen recently. People have different opinions on whether
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of particular species of
plants
and animals have become the main issue to our environment or
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are more vital problems around. I believe that we should take every environmental
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seriously. To start with
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, the expansion of cities
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caused the
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of animals and
plants
. To specify, in order to build more houses or grow
plants
,
rainforest
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has been cut down, which led to insufficient habitats for animals and
plants
.
Therefore
, I reckon that the public should not underestimate
this
problem
otherwise
it may cause
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extinction of species.
Nevertheless
, some may dispute that there are more others concerns
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our environment,
such
as global warming. It is undoubtful that
this
is another crucial concern around
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.
Regarding global
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warming, it has brought
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extreme weather in the past few years which
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caused
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damage
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nature
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environment and loss of species.
Hence
, global warming is another issue that society should cope with. In conclusion, I consider that there is no top priority when it comes to environmental concerns.
That is
to say, every problem related to our earth is important since it may
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a huge impact on our lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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