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You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email ·give details of the purchase ·describe the problem ·explain why you need a replacement urgently

#purchase #company #email #·give #·describe #·explain #replacement
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that a series of problems with some clothing I bought in your shop
last
 week. For my son's birthday party, I chose a cartoon suit from your webshop, but I feel disappointed when I received your parcel.
Firstly
, the package had broken at the side of the box which could make
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 the inside clothing. Fortunately, it didn't happen.
However
, I accept the problems of clothing, which
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 is different from your online pictures, the real one is darker, that looks dirty.
Additionally
, the size is bigger than your customer service describes, even though I affirmed many times with her. Because of the former questions I mentioned, I need a replacement urgently due to my son's birthday will be coming
next
 week, I appreciate you could notice
this
 problem and deliver new suitable clothing. I look forward to hearing from you and seeing the positive change at the earliest. Yours faithfully, Joanna Shen
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